Poem: "Up/Down" response to Poetree's Challenge #3...

[untonuggan]

...and also jjhunter 's dare that I enter. This idea has actually been kicking around in my brain since Friday, and it turns out a poem was the perfect way to express it. The following is an etheree, which is a very fun poem to write.

"Up/Down"

up
pedal
pump up hill
keep beat with breath
don't stop, don't think just
feel body flow breathe in
still on the edge of the hill
mockingbird breathes its soulmate's song
warbling in time with legs' up down
crescendo and crest the hill, fly back down


poem cross-posted to bicycles 

Comments

[untonuggan]

Thank you! I was wondering how to express some of the zen I was feeling on a bike ride I went on recently, because I was trying to use a lot of mindfulness techniques while I was riding. (Admittedly, partly so I could better deal with the burning sensation in my legs and hindquarters...)

I'm glad you got the wonder goosebumps! I like that line, too.